Ok guys I am a guy who works in a
MULTIMEDIA department and teach
MEDIA MOVING IMAGE, so I think I am qualified to comment on these (resum? on request, k thx).
Firstly, everything is all wrong. you should not have it in space at all! Or even have space ships, what you need to have is place it on a mountain, no wait, a tropic island
with a mountain. Then change it so instead of fighting (because those spaceships are
so gone, darling
) have it so that its like a reality TV show! Two competing teams from different TV shows, and they have to vote off the weakest person each time until only one is left. Then, on the season finale, you have this giant fist fight between the two winners. But its not like a fists as in hands, oh no, we need to draw in the audience, so they'll fight with giant bowls of 2 month old custard, the first to get food poisoning loses.
Additionally some form of weekly challenges where people either get defecated on shot at, or defecated on, because they dodged the bullet. TRUST ME I AM IN MEDIA I KNOW THIS.
Also, there needs to a be a late edition where a lot of 18 year old women have a lesbian orgy, to really pull in the straight male and lesbian female audience. Maybe some guy with no socks on can attract the homosexual men, I don't really know about that as its not my cup of tea, but still.
Other than that its a pretty good
draft rough cut final concept anamatic inital concept, and I look forward to the new version reflecting your changes!