If you guys wanna play my Foundry mission, it's called: For Every Action, by me, DJCurtis.
So far the people who've played it have really enjoyed it.
Just finished playing through it (and reviewed it), but i'll try and give a bit longer review here:
I found the mission to be quite enjoyable, and very well detailed both in dialog and maps. Some nice tie-ins to past events (such as the reference to an old Federation Captain). A few minor spelling errors, but nothing serious. Definitely felt like the beginning of a 2-part episode arc, and the final confrontation with the "enemy" felt a bit too easy. Granted, I played a Vice Admiral character, but still =P
One minor suggestion (if possible), is that when/if you recreate the mission on the Live server, is to try and merge 2 or more maps into one, if they are of the same type. I recall on atleast one occasion, where I was already in a space map, and I was suppose to warp to another space area (which required a loading screen). I know that certain Cryptic missions allow players to warp from point A to point B without the need for loading screen, so it would be nice if something similar can be achieved on player maps.
Also, for your first objective (reaching the Vhoran system to begin mission), might be better to actually state that as an objective, since you don't see that text anywhere after first accepting the mission. Was largely due to having read the mission text the first time, that I found my way to the mission start